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Earthquakes Cause Explosions by ~shanraii:iconshanraii:



Eccentricity was the name
carved out for you by God.
At the beginning of everything,
He took up His pen,
writing your genetic puzzle
as a giant heavenly earthquake
shook the paper.
You were the explosive product,
and youour very existance is
a detonator;
So I walk carefully.
©2007-2009 ~shanraii
:iconshanraii:

Author's Comments

This is the result of my life going pretty darned well and a boring English class.


Any critique or comments would be appreciated fullheartedly.

Edit.
I recieved notes that the line breaks throughout the poem were awkward. I've gone over and edited them in order to make the piece more readable. Also, in response to quite a few suggestions, I changes a few lines, particularily the "creation pen" line. Please, let me know what you think. The original version can be found here
/Edit.

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:iconmoses-of-suburbia:
Wow...
I think it's one of your best...

I think... Yeah. I'm pretty sure.

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Nobody expects the Spanish Inquisition!
:iconshanraii:
Oh wow thanks a ton!
: ) I'm pretty fond of it myself.
:glomp:

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~swimboy5002
:iconhell-on-a-stick:
nice work. visual and impactive if a bit dry. but then again maybe im just feeling a little dry these days.

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Behold! I am that which must always overcome itself. - Friedrich Nietzche
Now you can buy my book here!--------->>> [link]
:iconmoses-of-suburbia:
:D

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Nobody expects the Spanish Inquisition!
:iconjamblangas:
The phrase he took up his pen, doesnt sit right with me neither does the last 3 lines.

xoxo.

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Jaime (You smell like ass!)
Me (Yeah, because I have one!)

Clicking this [link] could possibly harm 17% of those who do!

I finally have my groove back!
:iconxblue-catx:
haha so funny XD i really like it :D

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Mew~~

Avie made by me 4 me~

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:icontabzthefish:
I like it!!!! :glomp:

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:bulletblack:"Despite everything, I believe that people are really good at heart."Anne Frank
:iconphotogem:
hey that is veeeeery cool, i must say :D. so, youre playing satruday? so you wont be at the monk to see me ross max and connor??? :( and there was someit else, but i foget..hm..

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Mohammad said: "Don't tell me how educated you are, tell me how far you've traveled."
:iconshanraii:
I'm play AT THE MONK on sat, silly.

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When you have insomnia, you're never really asleep...and you're never really awake.
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~swimboy5002

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